Score: 7

"Not bad."

submission: The Hit Man

date: September 3, 2008

Pretty good I have to admit. Do you plan on making a series of this?

Animation/Graphics - Well, almost everything was completely fine, except for people themselves. I can't say I really enjoyed the style of drawing that you had here, but if you are going to stick with it then you really need to improve on the smoothness. The men were very rough at best and had some rough edges.

Story - Not bad, not bad at all. A movie that could turn into a series if done correctly. The idea may not be original, but it is something that I enjoy watching. I have to say that there wasn't too much of a story though and it did end kind of sudden. The lack of story is ok, but in future submissions you should do something like having his boss call him up or and telling him who to kill, etc.. That will be stuff that you can come up with if you continue this as a series though.

Audio - I think it really lacked here. The sound effects were fine, but there should have been some background music, and in future submissions you should think about some voice acting. Actually if you want some voice acting I can do some for you. Just drop me a PM with the lines that you want me to say and I will be happy to do it for you.

Overall - A series, if worked on, could be a great series and fun to watch. Keep up the good work.

C52

Score: 4

"Alright."

submission: Parkinson's Awareness!

date: September 3, 2008

I noticed that you were receiving a lot of reviews that didn't really review the submission at hand, but instead they reviewed it with their own personal opinion, which is no way to review. I thought you might be interested in another good quality review so here I am. :)

Animation/Graphics - Not bad. They could use some work, but overall not too bad. Everything was decent in terms of background, color, animation, smoothness. I'm guessing smoothness, because it was a bit rough and glitchy for me, but my internet has been acting up, like it usually does, so I can't really review that part. I will just give you the benefit of the doubt. The animation you did have was very simple and I think that there is a need of just a little bit more to give it any extra points to the rating on this section.

Story - I'm sad to say that I didn't get it right away. As soon as I did I got a good laugh out of it though. Good humor, but it was lacking in somethings. It wasn't the funniest thing ever, but that would probably be after I got it, it kind of just went on for a little bit.. Like it was just based on one quick thing and then nothing else if that makes sense, but it stayed on that subject for too long.

Audio - This is where you could of greatly improved on your animation and if the following were fixed I would of probably gave you a much better rating. Sometimes the animation didn't always go good with the audio. He was playing the guitar before the song even started and then at the end he was still playing it when the audio itself had ended. I think that in the beginning that if you would of added a voice to the first person talking it would of greatly helped the score of your submission also. When the curtains opened it would of cool to had some sort of crowd clapping and when the song was over having the crowd go nuts and start clapping and cheering, etc.. Lastly, if there would of been some nice ambient sound effects while the music wasn't playing in the beginning then that would of also helped.

Overall, a decent short submission, which could be pretty good with a few things fixed up and added to it. Keep up the good work though and good luck on any future submissions.

C52

Score: 10

"For the love of god."

submission: Sleep Walker

date: September 2, 2008

I thought you had finished making movies. I was so pumped up when I saw this submission under judgment. You better believe that I 5'd in through man. You've been my favorite author on newgrounds since I joined back in 04. I actually notice you have a few submission that I haven't check out lately so I think I might have to go back and review them all until I have gotten them all. It may take awhile though. Never know, I might review enough of your submissions to actually get an author review from you. That would be awesome.

Animation/Graphics - You have really come a long from your early submissions if I may say so myself. I remember back in the day and the clay men weren't as neatly done and everything was just a bit messier and not as as smoothly animated. I know for a fact how hard it is to do claymation as I have made several myself and they have never, NEVER, turned anything out like this. If they did then I would have a new claymation submitted to newgrounds every month or so. Most if not all of the animation was very smooth. I like the part where the heads were shaking almost violently when they were about to stab him. (While they were still sleeping)

Story - I don't think any of your stuff could honestly get any funnier. I think the main reason for that is because of the very simple humor you use. Other people have to try so hard to get the same laughs out of other people, but with your submissions it seems like the humor is so effortless. This movie wasn't any exception as it was very funny. Also, the length of the submission was good. It wasn't too long or too short.

Audio - The voice acting you do is always great. Did you ever have a submission where you actually had someone else voice act from you? I guess that question was pretty useless though if you don't reply to my review. >.< Oh well, I guess I don't really have much more to say about the audio part of this submission.

Overall - A great addition to your Klay World. I hope you still have a few more submissions planned out. Actually I hope you keep submitting to newgrounds for long time. All of your Klay submissions deserve well over a 4 for their score. Also, how could this submission not have won a daily award? It was awesome.

C52

Score: 2

"Well.."

submission: Wegra Adventure 4

date: September 1, 2008

First off can I say wtf is going on?? Lol, oh well.

Animation/Graphics - Woah, you said it in your author comments. The graphics are just a bit fucked up. It almost just looked like copy and pasted picture of stuff. Almost something the kitty krew would do. >.< Maybe instead of just the stick man and the poor quality of everything else you might want to slow down and take your time while drawing everything. Also, the movie was kind of close to the animation. Back up a little and give some background to the movie and just pretty much make stuff a bit neater. Take your time.

Story - I didn't really know what was going on, but I'm sure that there is some sort of story behind this whole thing. Maybe I will need to watch the other episodes to find that story out, but sadly I don't have the time to review anything except for the stuff for the review request club. Also, the text wasn't always easy to read and at times moved too fast.

Audio - Simple audio, which worked, but at the same time I think voices and sound effects might of helped the score of this flash just a little bit. I know you didn't have a mic, but maybe next time get a hold of a voice actor or two for the characters.

Overall, if this was some sort of joke submission then I'm sorry for the really detailed review, but if it was a serious submission then I hope the suggestions in my review will help a little.

C52

~ Review Request Club ~

Score: 10

"Hmm."

submission: The Last Hour: Chapter 10

date: September 1, 2008

I might say this a lot in this review. Why couldn't this be done on your other movies? I will give it a 10 for a couple of reasons. It is well animated, there was a story behind it, and the audio was better. It doesn't deserve a 10, but I will put in consideration of how poorly done the other movies were.

Animation/Graphics - I might say this a lot in this review. Why couldn't this be done on your other movies? The animation was very good. Not elite, but still a lot better then any of the other submissions you had. ALSO, you had animation, actual animation with things moving and action. I'm very impressed with it. Colors, backgrounds, smoothness, and everything else was perfectly fine.

Story - I might say this a lot in this review. Why couldn't this be done on your other movies? There was an actual story behind this episode. I think it's the first time you could make some sort of sense of what the movie was about. It seems all along that your series was some sort of comedy, but I had no clue before because of the bad quality.

Audio - I might say this a lot in this review. Why couldn't this be done on your other movies? Well, not for all of the audio. The music itself was fine just like all of your other flashes, but this time around the voices were clear and almost enjoyable. My ears weren't stabbing themselves every time I heard a voice.

Overall, I still think this series was some sort of joke and nothing you can say can make me believe otherwise. This one was so much better then the other ones, but with some more work you could be earning some more awards now and then.

Oh yeah, I might say this a lot in this review. Why couldn't this be done on your other movies?

C52

~ Review Request Club ~

Score: 2

"Fuck this.. lol Sorry for my French."

submission: The Last Hour: Chapter 9

date: September 1, 2008

Not good at all..

Animation/Grahpics - The animation was very glitchy and rough. The space ship was drawn very nicely, but that was about it. Everything else may have actually been a step down from your other submissions.

Story - I honestly don't know why I didn't give this flash a 0/10. I am a nice person though. I also think that the score of this flash should be somewhere around a 1.5 or so. It's really that bad. No story at all. I can't even comment more then that.

Audio - Some music and nothing more. It was probably the only reason you received any points from me though. Other then that.. there isn't anything to comment on.

Overall, this is probably one of the most negative reviews I have left lately, but the flash deserves everything that I have said and probably a lot more then that. There wasn't anything here really so I don't see what I can review on.

C52

~ Review Request Club ~

Score: 5

"Hm.."

submission: The Last Hour: Chapter 8

date: September 1, 2008

Animation/Graphics - I can't say anything wrong with this at all really except for the lack of actual animation. Just like most of your other movies it's pretty much just like a picture and a couple of very slight movements. Nothing too great. The graphics and drawings are still getting a little better every time I see them. Good job there I guess.

Story - I can honestly say I haven't a clue what this series is about at all. The only thing I hear every time is the antichrist is doing this and doing that, blah blah... I really don't see how the story matches the animation too much.. something that really needs worked on in the future.

Audio - I think the audio in this one was really terrible. From all of the voices and all of the sound effects in general. The menu was the best sound effects. I think you need to get some voice actors and some people talented in audio to help with your series next time around.

Overall, this one wasn't very good at all. The audio was of bad quality and there wasn't too much animation at all. The cheesy humor that you tried to add really didn't help this series out at all.

C52

~ Review Request Club ~

Score: 5

"Hmm."

submission: Collector

date: August 29, 2008

Animation/Graphics - I really didn't personally enjoy the graphics too much. While there wasn't too much wrong in the sense of neatness or anything, but at the same time it was really really boring looking itself. Boring colors and boring shapes. The same old same old. This needs something to brighten it up. Some exciting colors, backgrounds, shapes, etc.. It's really just too simple and overused graphics.

Story - The game was nice, in fact it's actually fun with two people, but with one person it's really boring. It's fun that you had a survival mode, but maybe you need to add more to the survival mode. Like awards for reaching a certain amount of time, etc.. The two player system was kind of fun though. I give you props on that one.

Audio - The audio was a nice selection. Good job on that. I think the only thing that could make it any better in this case would maybe add some sound effects in when you win and/or don't reach a goal in the survival mode. ( I know you don't have goals in the survival mode, but it's also something I think would be pretty good to add) Something such as the crowd going, "Ahhhhhh mannn" or anything else related when you lost and vice versa have the crowd cheering when you won.

Overall, a game that could use a lot of improvement, but if you did work on it a bit then you could probably have a really decent game here. Also, authors response please. I put a lot of thought into this review. >.<

C52

~ Review Request Club ~

Score: 7

"Not bad."

submission: Narrative Flash Remake

date: August 28, 2008

* Side Note - This is the fucking second time I wrote this review because the last time I did I accidenlty pushed the back button on my keyboard and my entire review was deleted before I finished it. It actually took me quite awhile to write it too. >:( Also, I do not enjoy poetry, but I don't review flashes on whether I like the subject or not, since I don't find that fair. Rather, I will review the flash on it's quality.

Animation/Graphics - While there wasn't any animation in your flash I'm sure I can still find some stuff to review about. The menu itself wasn't very organized and the background was boring. If this was improved on then my rating for the flash would probably go up another point or even two. I think they need to be put into columns and you need to look for a background like you had in the poems themselves.

Story - I only read the entirety of one poem because like I said before poetry really isn't my favorite thing in the world. The text was fine and the words were easy to read. The file size was huge also, did you compress the audio? If you didn't then compressing the audio might cut the file size in half maybe even more.

Audio - While the music went perfectly with the poems, I really didn't enjoy the button to shut the music off for one reason. While you could shut it off there was no button to turn them back on. I looked around for one and read your directions and there didn't seem to be one. I think that would be a good contribution to this flash also.

Overall, pretty much work on the menu and maybe add that button for the audio that I suggested. Good job.

C52

~ Review Request Club ~

Score: 9

"Lmao. I loved it."

submission: Forever Young

date: August 28, 2008

Animation/Graphics - The animation and drawings, while being very simple, were really nicely done. This seemed to be one of those flashes that didn't really need any fancy animation or graphics to make it good. Everything ran smoothly and I couldn't really find anything wrong with it. When the egg closed his eyes it kind of looked weird. It looked more like he was rolling his eyes into the back of his head because everything was white, but I guess there wouldn't be too much to do about that since.. well.. everything is white lol.

Story - I was thinking that it was going to be predictable just because of the song and everything. I knew that something was going to happen exactly like it did. So while it was very predictable it still caught me by suprise for one reason. You allowed the egg to sing the song for long enough so that the movie wasn't boring, but you kind of drift off and forget that something is probably going to happen to the egg. That and the fact that it did happen so quickly. A pretty funny flash.

Audio - The song was great and all other sound effects were done perfectly fine. The only thing I can really find to give criticism to about the audio was that it didn't allows seem like it was synced up with the voices perfectly. At the same time it was just enough to give you the feeling that the egg was really singing the song though.

Overall, a funny short flash that deserves the rating I have given it. It's worth a watch in my opinion.

C52

~ Review Request Club ~